It looks pretty good. I'd probably try and find a way to make it just a little more concise although I don't know how that might be possible with it as it stands. I only say so because too much info is a killer for most people. Hook 'em with the intro and then present them with a delicious idea that they'll not be able to stop thinking about. The rest will come in time.Quote:
Originally Posted by mgraepel
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