Thread: Can you help critique this?

Looks good eh.
Small suggestion regarding the email link though.
Maybe change it to info@ instead of ceo@translation10n. To me, would imply a larger outfit than an email to the CEO themselves.overall, good layout..
Just my $0.02 however. Good luck with the venture..
Cheers.

Originally Posted by Suticat

What was your first impression? Did it resinate business/professional to you?

How honest and direct an answer do you want

Originally Posted by gugi

How honest and direct an answer do you want

Keep it to PM ..............

Looks nice and does have a professional feel. Just a couple of minor suggestions. On the "home" landing page I would not repeat my tag line in the large central message area. I'd leave the tag line below the company name and come up with another message for the central area. Also further down in the text I'd remove the "focus" wording at the beginning of the last sentence. It's a little repetitive as "focused" is in the previous sentence as well. Last suggestion on the "Our Vision" landing page I'd remove the link to the "Our Vision" landing page or use it for something else.

Originally Posted by Brenngun

Looks nice and does have a professional feel. Just a couple of minor suggestions. On the "home" landing page I would not repeat my tag line in the large central message area. I'd leave the tag line below the company name and come up with another message for the central area. Also further down in the text I'd remove the "focus" wording at the beginning of the last sentence. It's a little repetitive as "focused" is in the previous sentence as well. Last suggestion on the "Our Vision" landing page I'd remove the link to the "Our Vision" landing page or use it for something else.

Thanks. She plans on adding a few more pages that are client/industry specific. The Tag line on the front page will change every few months to keep it fresh. She plans on using it as a marketing ploy. Not 100% sure what she has his mind but she knows. I took the Vision page out of the regular menu bar and made it a sub link on the page. If you look on some mobile devices, the programs are driven by the menu bars. She didn't want it to be part of that and the only way around it was to make a separate link on the page. She is going to add more/better content to in near future so the industry knows who they are dealing with. Name recognition is huge in her business, not so much business name but personal names. There is a lot of turn over/employee hopping within this industry at the level of real decision makers. And they are loyal to each other not the companies.

I do know she plans on making a "mascot" for lack of a better term and have it travel with her to meetings, conventions and vacations. It will be posted on the social media as an ongoing story line. She plans on using it as a marking toy too. Some swag for her conventions. These guys are suckers for that kind of stuff. Still trying to come up with a name for it. She's thinking either a lion or a plush toy made to look our leopard cat that was the driving force for the logo. He original idea spawned from the image below. Its all about being one thing and seeing yourself as something bigger and better on the inside. Blah, blah blah... Im just the web guy. LOL

Nicely done page. Sends a nice professional message. The only thing I *might* consider is starting some kind of email/newsletter opt-in. You could offer updates or changes in her field, or a freebie guide. Once she grows her email list she has a list of people who have already shown interest in what her and her company does. Great way to launch a new product or get feedback. Looks good, great job

Originally Posted by MattCB

Nicely done page. Sends a nice professional message. The only thing I *might* consider is starting some kind of email/newsletter opt-in. You could offer updates or changes in her field, or a freebie guide. Once she grows her email list she has a list of people who have already shown interest in what her and her company does. Great way to launch a new product or get feedback. Looks good, great job

She's already been published in several journals and does a does a biweekly publication on her LinkedIn about all sorts of issues within her industry. Next month she is scheduled to speak at a convention in Austin Tx. We are trying to figure out how to incorporate that into the site other than the social media announcements. She has about 1600 followers within her industries vertical on LinkedIn.

Looks very professional.
I personally don't like phrases like this one: The core of what we do is driven by the quality we deliver and not by the amount of profit we make
As a customer I am interested in the quality and its price, not the paycheck of the guys doing the work.

I hope she and her colleagues are able to deliver all their promises.
I once translated a Dutch borchure into English for the father of a friend of mine. That was a tough job with all the jargon that does not always translate well into another language.

Originally Posted by Utopian

So you decided to use tact? I tried that once...

When? .

Originally Posted by edhewitt

When? .

I chose not to respond to post 47 HERE.