Thread: Converting disposable shavers to straight

We could even use that as the subject line. People would click on it perhaps even in a reactionary manner, then get pulled in regardless. I've edited the post again to reflect the suggested change. How does it look now?

Just a quick note on this.

I would drop all mention of saving money. I would focus instead on the
quality of shaves, the pleasure of the ritual, the history, the connection with your ancestors and the TOYS!

It is great to be STR8!

Everyday I am STR8, just like my great-grandfather, grandfather and father, now I also am STR8 razor man. Every morning I pick up the sharpest edge man has ever used, whip up a bountiiful, warm lather, brush the hot lather on my whiskers witth a soft badger brush. Then the cold, ultra sharp steel is stropped until the perfect edge is at hand. Then, gently, and with skill, the whiskers are removed. Smoothly, without hesitation or pull, they disappear.


You get the idea,

Originally Posted by mgraepel

I've edited the post again to reflect the suggested change. How does it look now?

It looks pretty good. I'd probably try and find a way to make it just a little more concise although I don't know how that might be possible with it as it stands. I only say so because too much info is a killer for most people. Hook 'em with the intro and then present them with a delicious idea that they'll not be able to stop thinking about. The rest will come in time.

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I've posted this at my local CL. We'll see what kind of response it garners, but you can see it for yourself here. If you want to post this in your local area, feel free to copy and paste it to yours. I just placed it in the general section of the community board.

Great ad! I like the title a lot. I think it'll really prompt lots of people to read it out of curiosity. Think of another couple of clever titles like that, re-post it a few more times and I'll bet you get a lot more hits on StraightRazorPlace over the next few weeks.

I just wanted to follow up with this and let people know that I cannot post this in multiple cities. The system comes back and tells me I already have a very similar ad posted in Portland. So it goes back to people having to post this in their local city themselves. If you run into the same problem I do, try and tweak the title and/or body text a little. If you have any issues posting, feel free to contact me.

-Mark