Thread: 'Tis The Season

It's really great to see the straight razor renaissance in action. (Though maybe we won't like it so much if everybody starts doing it? )

Good job on doing your part to spread the word!

Had I read that article before you submitted it, I probably would have suggested you leave out the colloquilaisms which are used pretty much exclusively here on the board. The "baby-butt-smooth" one was okay (minus the abbreviation), but I would have omitted some of the other jargon a casual reader might find to be a little too cliquey. Your article's main focus is clearly to educate, and I think it does that pretty well, especially by referencing some of the popular online vendors and highlighting how a freshman just getting into the hobby can do it pretty affordably. I also like how the title hints at how straight razors bring joy to your shave, which is something your average, miserable Mach-3 user will definitely find appealing! Certain parts of the article, however, don't strike me as being very accessible to the average Joe who has simply stumbled across it while thumbing through the pages, you know?

Other than that, it's cool. Some of the phrasing is kind of awkward, though, which made me raise an eyebrow a couple of times throughout. At the beginning, for instance, when you say, "Grandpa most likely went straight every morning. Straight razor, that is." That just doesn't flow - and you need that opening paragraph to grab the reader. When you tack those two little blurbs together in your mind, you think, "So...grandpa went...straight razor? Uhm." You know what I mean? It's perfectly clear what the intended meaning was, but a bit of its punch was lost in the syntax.

Anyhow, I hope I've not been too critical. All in all, I enjoyed the read, and I'm going to have to check out that article in Playboy I've heard mentioned a few times already. If you want me to read or edit anything you write in the future, don't hesitate to send it my way!

That's a great article. I posted a comment. Thanks, Mack

Every single person in this thread got a "Thanks!" from Obie except for me!

Sorry if you thought I was plucking at your laurels, but wow, I was simply trying to give some constructive criticism. I said I found the article to be an enjoyable read overall and even pointed out specific parts that I liked. I gave you what I thought were some helpful hints and even offered my time in the future should you wish to run something by me, and yet...I was skipped over.

Can't count the times I have been skiped over. Sometimes it is not personal. Just happens.

Originally Posted by Blade Wielder

Every single person in this thread got a "Thanks!" from Obie except for me!

Sorry if you thought I was plucking at your laurels, but wow, I was simply trying to give some constructive criticism. I said I found the article to be an enjoyable read overall and even pointed out specific parts that I liked. I gave you what I thought were some helpful hints and even offered my time in the future should you wish to run something by me, and yet...I was skipped over.

In fairness, think about how you would have reacted.

You're a professional writer, and you spend a long time crafting an article, doing interviews, writing and re-writing to get it just the way you want it. This article is professionally written and is published in another professionally produced publication.

Then you post a link to that article on a public forum of a group of people who you think may be interested.

Then one of those people (who may not even be a writer himself) posts a pretty blunt public critique of your article and suggests at the end that you send any future work to him for review and editing.

Seriously? Would you have thanked someone for that?

I dont usually comment on these sorts of things, but personally I found your post to be condescending and rather insulting. I appreciate that you may not have meant it that way, but please bear in mind how your posts could be construed before you post them.

Originally Posted by Blade Wielder

Every single person in this thread got a "Thanks!" from Obie except for me!

Sorry if you thought I was plucking at your laurels, but wow, I was simply trying to give some constructive criticism. I said I found the article to be an enjoyable read overall and even pointed out specific parts that I liked. I gave you what I thought were some helpful hints and even offered my time in the future should you wish to run something by me, and yet...I was skipped over.

And someone asked about why a person would get banned from here.......Sorry guys but there is nothing innocent about these posts and they will stop here. Please don't thank me........

Lynn

A huge thanks to Obie.. People writing these articles and spreading the word is what SRP is about. I'm proud to have Obie as a member here.

Great Post . Wonderful.AAAAAAAAA

Originally Posted by Stubear

In fairness, think about how you would have reacted.

You're a professional writer, and you spend a long time crafting an article, doing interviews, writing and re-writing to get it just the way you want it. This article is professionally written and is published in another professionally produced publication.

Then you post a link to that article on a public forum of a group of people who you think may be interested.

Then one of those people (who may not even be a writer himself) posts a pretty blunt public critique of your article and suggests at the end that you send any future work to him for review and editing.

Seriously? Would you have thanked someone for that?

I dont usually comment on these sorts of things, but personally I found your post to be condescending and rather insulting. I appreciate that you may not have meant it that way, but please bear in mind how your posts could be construed before you post them.

You're right, I suppose the post could be construed as condescending.

Obie, if that's the impression I left on you, I apologize. I don't have any articles of my own about straight razor shaving to post, so who am I to say anything?

Once again, an enjoyable read.

Originally Posted by dwessell

A huge thanks to Obie.. People writing these articles and spreading the word is what SRP is about. I'm proud to have Obie as a member here.

I agree. It always impresses me how new shavers are constantly coming here. I stumbled across the "Introduce Yourself" thread a week or so ago and there were new posts all the time. It's not just the guys these days, either. I've noticed all kinds of women getting involved. (Which is great!) Hopefully Obie's article wrangles some new recruits!